Helpful McHelpfulpants

If you are seriously ten years old, I will never, ever, ever forgive you for being this talented. Ever. Ever. but with salty tears that could crumple Lot and his ...

You had some nice images in this, but I wasn't really moved by it as a whole because, I think, you used some sentiments that were too familiar, too traditional. ...

I recommend cutting out the two paragraphs entirely, because they're boring . Who cares what Matt thinks of Twilight or his homework or his love life? Sure, it develops his ...

It was interesting, but I didn't come away affected by the message or moved for the world being shunned, which seems rather a waste. I didn't pay much note to ...

I too thought the bird metaphor was marvelous and found everything else a bit... lacking, mostly because the reader really has no investment in the speaker; we are not anchored, ...